Editing Tips

Without Respect is live!

Without Respect (Mobsters’ Gay Sons Series #1) is LIVE!

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An Italian mobster raises three sons, but Sal’s youngest son, Benito Banetti, is gay. His father would never permit Ben to be in an openly gay relationship. But Ben intends to change that when he finds the man he wants. When it turns out the man Ben’s been seeing is a Banetti family enemy, his father gives him an ultimatum. Either he marries his cousin and all is forgotten, or if he chooses to be with Mishka Chernov, a Russian mobster, he will disown him.

Mishka Chernov took over his family’s business out of love and respect for his father; however, he has come to realize he isn’t suitable for this top position in the family. Mishka meets a beautiful man at a sleazy bar, and when he finds out who this man is, he still wants him regardless of the problems Ben Banetti would cause his family’s business. Mishka wants the same freedom and separation from family business that Ben has.

Without Respect is about two men raised by mob bosses, realizing their families are enemies, but neither is willing to walk away. This story is book one of a MM romance that follows their relationship. It has some D/s and light BDSM elements.

 

Adverbs

Adverbs

Apparently, adverbs stink up your fiction, so out go all the perfect adverbs. Here I am doing a search for “ly” words and replacing adverbs with action verbs. Since when did the Parts of Speech have a hierarchy? Many publishers reject manuscripts because of the damn dirty adverbs that are creating a foul smell in your story. Frankly, I love adverbs. Maybe someone could create a “Adverbsaurus” that can create verbs from adverbs. That would be helpful!!

Let’s not forget you must rid your story of the passive voice. You know, any form of the verb “to be”. Also please do not leave in too many “this” or “that” either; I have to work on REVISION. This part of writing stinks.

Currently, I have 102, 544 words for my novel Rent Me.

Here is THE CABIN in my book that I used.

cabin